Broken Hearts Still Want to Love

Review of version chapter 3 part 2 I am torn, right now, after reading this VN. On one side I see potential in story of a men who mends torn hearts of sexy women, on the other side a totally weird writing not only grammatically flawed but also sometimes boring with prolong conversation where characters explains their train of thoughts. Moreso is it depressing when we have 2900 slides (I don't know how you call it) that are pointing that it's story driven VN. Normally I don't review VN if story didn't advance much but in this case I lost so much time reading it that I must say something to those who want to try it. Premiss is interesting. Like I written before a lonely man that help women to find love and affection again. Execution is just terrible. -Probably 10% of the dialogue consists of part of the sentence popping up after a second or more, which can quickly cause readers to skip the text. Very frustrating. Spoiler: Example -"Then enjoy the moment while you can... [sec for this piece to pop] because we're almost there..." Why use something like that in this statement? It neither adds dynamics nor adds to the emotion, except for frustration if you've read the first part and are in the middle of clicking, which interrupts the second part. - No music, except for the menu. Virtually no sound, except for the phone ringing and kisses. They might as well not exist. - Many flaws related to masking incestuous relationships. I understand that there are problem with publishing this kind of content but it doesn't excuse developer or writer. Using old "tricks" like relationship change is ok in porn driven VN, and even then it has flaws. - Hopeless, dry, even clinical dialogues like: - "Then, with your permission, I can start checking your arm and leg" - "You have my permission, [roommate]. Do what you think is right" ...and there are many more. People don't talk like that, especially in a "roommate-to-roommate" relationship. The conversation between people is usually either very dry, even clinical, or overly exaggerated, saturated with emotion and sweetness of expression. Everything is told as if by a person with bipolar disorder. Given the length of the dialogue and the sometimes overly drawn-out lines, one might conclude that the main aspect of this VN will be the story, and it will drive the whole thing. However, the dryness of the dialogue and the fruitless—if attempted IRL—compliments intended to portray the MC as a gentleman are a major drawback of this VN. Only when I read encounter with ex-girlfriend I saw something in the writing. Yet It went downhill fast. TLDR Story: Bad writing with dryness of dialog makes it hard to enjoy. Premiss is interesting yet execution needs more time and maybe a good editor not only for proofreading but slapping the writer when they go to long with conversations. Characters: MC is a broken man, it shows with e-girlfriend encounter and her seducing spells thrown at MC. I don't know what writer intents but it looks like she wants to cheat with MC so be warned if you don't like read something like that. Ladies are interesting. It pains be that best looking is MCs ex. Porn factor: Almost no sex scenes just teasers. It looks like it's story driven VN so a slow burn. That give us, for 2900 slides or clicks or whatever Ren'py calls the numbers after hiting F2, a whooping one handjob and a two-finger play with dick by roommate when MC sleeps. Rest is history obfuscated by Ctrl/skip. I would give it two stars if writer would promise that there will be made pass on everything by some form of professional editor (the job not a program) and only then I could give this VN another chance.

Ch.3 P1 I honestly can't tell what the story is about because the writing is just too poor to get through. This sounds like some other language that is just forced through language translator. But even then, the conversations feel "off" in more than one way. Visually game is ok. Good enough, if there was more than just pictures. But not alone worth it. Pity, as i liked how the mature women did look.

Exactly 3 choices in the time I played and I'm past the first chapter/part/episode whatever its called here. This is kinetic, its missing the tag and its not good. LI's are meh looking as well. Concept is boring/generic No reason to waste your time

Grammar is atrocious but the dev still tries to use sophisticated wording with the characters. English is clearly not the first language. Honestly if someone would come on and rewrite it I would probably enjoy it a bit more. The lack of information from the characters in the story is a shitty attempt to build suspense but it is done so poorly that it is just annoying. There is a backstory there that should be told to help understand what's happening but we aren't getting it. I'm sure it will come in later chapters but I don't think I'll stick around for this one.