Faded Love

I don't want to be too hard on this, this early on, but it's..rough. So Spoiler: main plot point so far MC partially loses his memory in an accident. . He wakes up to Maya sitting beside him, she says she is in love with him, and he almost immediately thinks "yea, she's special" and within a single conversation, he is saying he loves her. The problem with this is a number of reasons, but mostly, if you're going to use the MC's current condition as a catalyst for pushing the story forward, it should MEAN something. If it's brushed aside within a few seconds and him and Maya are banging (they HADNT BEFORE) within a day or him waking up, you're left wondering, "why was this story even set up this way?" It's just bizarre. Dialogue: not great, MC narrates everything that he sees even when it's really obvious. "oh wow, a beautiful girl." "omg, she's standing up" "her eyes are blue", etc, etc. Please, PLEASE dev, SHOW NOT TELL. Adding more dialogue just to pad the length really doesn't help, in any situation. Choices: limited to side girls so far, you're forced to bang the main LI. It seems like she'll be the forced center of the harem story with all the other girls being optional. Not a fan. Overall, an overly sappy love story start to something that could be more if it changes course early enough. We'll see though.

VERSION: Ch.1 v0.1 SUMMARY: Solid start, worth checking out, but not remarkable. RATINGS: (out of 5): ⭐⭐⭐ NOTE: The following categories and scoring method are my own criteria and may require more context. Additionally , scoring is based on the state, and what is in the current version and not what may or may not be introduced at a later point. Character (Model) Visuals......... : ⭐⭐⭐ General (World) Visuals........... : ⭐⭐⭐ Animation Quality................. : ⭐⭐⭐ Character Personality(Persona).... : ⭐⭐⭐ Story & Dialogue .................. : ⭐ Writing & Grammar................. : ⭐ ⭐ UX/UI, Game Type & Mechanics.......: ⭐⭐⭐ Playtime & Pacing ..................: ⭐⭐⭐ Music & Sounds .....................: ⭐⭐⭐ Adult Content & Fetishes.......... : ⭐⭐⭐ Average: X of 50 possible points giving a X% rating i.e. X stars. PROS: - See my opinions section for details. Visually doesn't look too bad actually, but LIs eyes are just bit too big... Sounds are decent, some music and ambient sounds at least. The way the dev tried to tie it into the dialogue is admirable even if not done 100%. Lewd sounds also included while basic and can do with more attention is at least there and serviceable. Animation quality is fairly decent, but inconsistent see Cons. CONS: - See my opinions section for details. Some awkward dialogue can use revision, off the bat the MC is thinking about the beautiful girl sitting next to his bed. the very next line he she flies up happy to see him awake. The MC thinks "a beautiful girl with..." Why speak like this? Start with A beautiful girl is sitting next to my bed. Then the next say "she notices me looking at her and rushes to my bedside." Thats the correct way to structure sentences... Writing and grammar in general need attention and revision. Audio volume is quite for ambient and character sounds, this needs its own volume setting! Camera angles or POV feel weird, like the screen sucks your eyes in. Some inconsistencies with colours and proportions, partially due to the weird camera angle e.g. MC lying on bed looks out of proportion, like his lower half is longer than uper, his legs are more yellow and looks like he has jaundice frankly... Porn logic writing, that is so stupid and nonsensical...e.g. the "doctor" dresses up like she is ready for a cheap porno shoot, then while the MC is doing his EKG whatever on the treadmill she starts rubbing herself off? WTF man! This is just stupid lazy writing. Inconsistent renders during animations e.g. with the handjob from doctor, the MCs dick looks like a horsecock then in next render its size is reduced to somewhat more normal yet porn actor state. Very short, not much at all to really sink your teeth into. OPINIONS, SUGGESTIONS & FINAL REMARKS : NOTE: The following remarks are my personal opinions and thoughts, which may provide more context and could be useful to the developer. (Read them or don't) The point above about poor writing may sound like nitpicks but generally there are issues with the, structure and dialogue, that require more thought and care. e.g. girl says MC has been sitting there in bed, but correct would be lying in bed. Small nitpick, but added to the other points it starts adding up. Per writing, the MC saying he loves the GF, but doesn't know her? Then next frame he says he wants to fall in love with her all over again. Which is it? he is in love or not, make up your mind on the story. Frankly you don't need to dramatize or try so hard to create a loving reunion. If anything the MC has no memory of her, she is a stranger invading his space, despite her intentions being good. This flies in the face of what the doctor said even and whats know about victims with brain trauma and memory issues. While the MCs GF looks reasonable good, her freckles over her eyes and nose are so intense that it looks like war paint...Dev please take it easy, you only need a light dusting and freckles are not JUST over the eyes and nose, you get them a little all over the face... Here is not much to review, but what is here is sadly not that great either. Enough is/was going for it, until the porn actress scene with the doctor, here the logic goes tits up (literally) and bullshit ensues which completely throw the player off. TLDR: Not bad, but not great either though, the dialogue and grammar need revision. The weird camera angle does put me off and warps some of the renders for me and lead or exacerbate other visual issue like proportions and that make other issues more obvious. The writing, flow and dialogue are not well structured, planned or thought out and causes me to pause and question why the developer didnt have this script properly proof read by someone skilled in English writing. Strong porn logic also is a major issue for me.