The Magus

I like the models, not the best but good. The story seems interesting, my only complaint is the narration is too long winded. I mean get to the point. The narrator says like 3 or 4 paragraphs worth of crap that's not needed on his arrival to the house. My recommendation to the author is to take a look at the hundreds of games that have the mc come home after being away for a long time and look at how much narration is needed. here's a hint not that much. we get it he's coming home.